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In Your Presence

 

 

 

 

My shuddering breath

makes you hot,

as blood,

races through veins,

like wild horses travel

plains, we are

free to roam,

 

to feed, to drink our fill

of the delights before us

that calls and like

a sweet zephyr, we

are enticed with

natural draw,

 

that promises to satiate

our appetites

so very ravenous and

breathing deeply, we

anticipate the many pleasures

of a plentiful bounty.

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Dalaney gold member
    August 3, 2008
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  • tara wilson gold member
    August 2, 2008

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    "as blood,

    races through veins,

    like wild horses travel

    plains,"

    a lovely sensual poem, thanks so much for this entry


  • individuality gold member
    July 24, 2008

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    ah - are we free though? we might be given the illusion of freedom but i do not think we are actually free to roam. zephyr, had a cat called that, it died recently, maybe this is why i am feeling a little negative in my comment


  • Avendesora Dreamer
    July 24, 2008

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    hmmmm....PURR! No other way to describe the sexy feeling emanting from these words...simple images that alone not nessisarily shudder provoking, but together... I love how each image flowed into the next like they were always meant to be that way... Good luck!


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    July 23, 2008

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    Saucy - and maybe even a little vampy towards the middle.

    Whatever the case, it's definitely SEXY! You are one hell of a sensual writer!!!

    You had me there, longing for more.


  • michichoeret
    July 23, 2008
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    very good

    very alluring, very sexy

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