Your eyes flutter as they fight,
against the Night's silent temptations,
of slumber and the black abyss
I watched captivated,
as the Night pulls you under her spell
baddum....baddum....
My eyes drink you in,
whilst my heart whispers it's satisfaction,
with every pull of my heart strings
as my fingers explore the contours of your face,
relishing in the forbidden freedom
baddum....baddum....baddum....
Palms and finger tips tingle,
my secret thirst rises,
as my fingers gently mark your lips
with their touch, unknowingly,
tempting my lips to follow
baddum baddum....baddum baddum....
I lean into your person,
capturing your lips with mine
colors implode behind my eyelids,
while my world rights itself,
and my heart thrums it's approval
baddum baddum baddum....baddum baddum....
As my cheeks burn without hesitation,
my smile contains the knowledge,
of my eternal secret unknown to you,
that again tonight, we share
an endless stolen kiss
baddum baddum.... baddum....
Author notes
My inspiration is the love of my life, Ben. This is my first time writing anything with parts that are supposed to incorporate a sound of some sort. I hope it turns out the way I meant it to. Criticism is welcome as well as insight on how I can improve my writing abilities, and the poem itself. thank you.
In a list
A contest entry
- Poetry, Poetry and PreWrites! by Lost Vampyre Angel.
1200 points, ended September 13, 2008, 341 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Just let me know what you think of the poem.
Comments
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I lean into your person,
capturing your lips with mine
colors implode behind my eyelids,
while my world rights itself,
beautiful
I like the 'colours implode'
most people would say 'explode'
but I like yours better -
this made me smile :)
this was adorable, i loved it.
i especially liked your incorporation of 'heartbeats' between stanzas. -
AW
That's so beautiful! I love it.
Absolutley adorable it is. ^.^
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AMAZING!!!
I wanted it to keep going
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