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Seven Hours and Sixteen Minutes Before Work the Next Day












"I, uhhh...I
think I'm finished.
How 'bout you?"

"...Sure.
G'night luv."

"Yeah."











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Won silver in this contest: http://allpoetry.com/contest/2414161

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  • kyew
    May 30

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    ha! I don't think it could be more blatantly put, the *yawn* between these two people. very tactical to go with dialogue. I think tht really drove the point home, making the reader visualize the exchange.

  • Lady Altheia
    January 26

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    Okay IO think I get it. However that is half an hour longer than usual right? Congrats on placing silver. Best of luck to you in the contest.

  • a n e s t h e s ia
    October 17, 2008
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    Ha.
    Well the title reminds me of the attitude I used to have towards school.
    Good modernism


  • charcoal
    October 4, 2008
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    so fun


  • Wind 03
    August 13, 2008
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    loool

    hahahaha...you mad me laugh...)) niceeeee!


  • Dienush
    August 11, 2008
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    So cute. Congrats on the silver


  • Joan-of-Arc
    August 9, 2008
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    . Made me smile.

    -joan.


  • emopoetess
    August 3, 2008
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    I love it!!!! simple yet 2 the point! funny 2.


  • catz Moderators member
    July 26, 2008
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    Lol...

    Dee


  • jantastic gold member
    July 23, 2008
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    A fine example of why it's been too long since I've read your work.


  • sailor ptolema
    July 23, 2008
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    ahahahhahahahaahaaah . Brilliant.

    That's all I have to say

    ~Meg

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