The heart:
full to over-flowing
bursting at the seams.
vacant like a vacuum
devoid of even dreams
beating like a drum,
anticipation, joy.
silent, lifeless
another displaced toy.
ripe for the picking
eager to be used.
fallen to the ground
discarded, damaged, bruised.
flexible and willing,
like elastic it expands,
always open, hopeful,
makes but few demands,
even with no reason
it flings open wide,
always ready to give
love just one more try.
Author notes
"Dance with the words Mary"
A contest entry
- PIF I Deserve A Gold by Rakerman1.
475 points, ended August 9, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Survival ...
and your poem has nicely shared that theory. A heart can take abuse and rebound with hope! I'm enjoying my morning of reading your works! j
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A very creative poem. I couldn't help thinking slightly Seuss-ical. I am not sure why, but for me that's a good thing. I really like this poem, and will probably add it to my bookmarks (if you don't mind) because I think it's really well done, descriptive, and not like most of the "broken-heart" poetry I read, and sometimes write. Great job!
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Excellent writing. Very imaginative and pretty much on the mark with flow and rhyme. A true image of a heart.
Very well done
Raker
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what a beautiful poem! I really enjoyed reading it. Best of luck in the contest!!
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I like this a lot. It has a kind of like...sing-songy feel to it, and it flows very well, one thing into the next into the next. Nice job.
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"vacant like a vacuum
devoid of even dreams"
I love those lines. Well wishes in the contest.
nice job I think. -
A good write. Good imagery, flow, rhyme and tone.
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vacant like a vacuum devoid of even dreams beating like a drum,anticipation, joy.silent, lifeless
another displaced toy.always ready to give
love just one more try.wow a wonderfully deep poem with some great emotional imagery good luck in the contest
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