Ebony trees take a stand,
Against a whitewashed, forsaken land,
Branches dead, leaves faded away,
The evening sky is a bleak and dismal grey.
The sky is fabric bleached by time,
Never affected by reason and rhyme,
The bleak white sky which has no sun,
A traveler, of color, is forced to run.
But he's trapped in a whirl,
Left behind in an Ebony forest, Ivory world,
Where black and white fight for control,
One owns the earth, the other, the whole
of the sky, the top of the planet.
This is a planet destroyed by sin,
Death brought forth by ambitious women and men,
Who when creating in turn destroyed.
In a bleak corner there is a sign,
It reads: Ebony forest, Ivory world. Please avoid.
A contest entry
- ivory by unraveled.
450 points, ended August 8, 2008, 11 entries
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Intresting, the flow in the first half was seemless, yet the last half had some bumps. Yet the almost smoothe effect gave it some spin. I like the use of title, but the theme is not as fresh as the approach, made for this and enjoyable read.
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this piece rocks and the contrast is really effective of black an white
Who when creating in turn destroyed.
In a bleak corner there is a sign,
It reads: Ebony forest, Ivory world. Please avoid.
i love the ending like a no trespass sign
VWD!
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I love the title for this!!
full of great images, great wording. my favorite verse is,
'But he's trapped in a whirl,
Left behind in an Ebony forest, Ivory world,
Where black and white fight for control,
One owns the earth, the other, the whole
of the sky, the top of the planet.'
Lovely
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Neat, I like the way you pitch black and white against each other, and even though it's kind of a gloom-and-doom image, it's written pretty well.
Thanks for entering,
-cassidy
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You painted such an amazing picture for me. It's like something from my head, I love it.
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