Poetry is homemade soup:
Cracked bone of the past
contributes character to broth;
Recent leftovers
of favorites and failures
give substance and color;
Fresh herbs from the garden of experience
add tang and brightness,
and the
Salt of understanding
savors all.
Author notes
The bone is cracked to better release the marrow or "good" into the broth; "cracked" can also mean broken, as well as "To discover the solution to, especially after considerable effort: crack a code."
Bon appetite!
A contest entry
- Do You Write Serious Poetry or the Kind that Rhymes? (Contest) by Peripatetic.
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Pot au feu...
on the back of the stove
Add something new
every time you sup
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what a wonderfull recpie,loved this it sums up what poetry is all about.
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HOODWINKED !!!
This is a thoughtful look at the ingredients used to make good poetry. I like your imagery and metaphoric cooking references. This is a subject close to our heart! Well done!
You have been Hoodwinked today by the Poetic Bandits because WE CARE!
Dennis
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I like this very much! Well done. My favorite line as I first read this was,
Cracked bone of the past
And after reading your author notes, I can appreciate it even more. Well done.
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I like this!
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Thank you, Olivia33!
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I like this! So true! So true!
Love the idea of "gnawed bone"; an ache so deep it eats your bone, and yet, for the metaphor of soup, I would not add a "gnawed bone" to soup. It sounds as though it might have been in a dog's mouth. (I'm being picky here, but you like picky) Perhaps "stripped bone" or "picked bone"-
something on that idea, but stronger...
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Thank you, Freed by Mercy! You are right, I "like picky," particularly when it helps me avoid conveying an unintended image or idea!!! I changed it and added a note. Many thanks!
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"Cracked" works very well!
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Ah, yes! I recognize this recipe. I have used it many times with uneven success, but success all the same. I especially like this ingredient:
"Recent leftovers
of favorites and failures
give substance and color;"
The entire poem is a metaphorical image simmered and served to our delight, whetting our appetites for more.
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Brilliant! This is a wonderful metaphor, poetry as soup for the soul, wonderful! And you are a master chef!
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