I taste your sweetness
as the dam opens between your hips,
letting your love overflow,
flooding my heart and body.
I feel so at home
surrounded by your
sensual juices.
As I continue to drink
please continue to feed me.
I begin to realize
how much you need me.
I notice how much I need you.
That sparks a heightened passion
that explodes when we both climax.
I feel your waves of love
crashing against my body.
Feel my jets of passion
massage your body in our
jacuzzi of love.
Let us remember each other's warmth
and kisses as we bask in the afterglow
of loving tenderness.
A contest entry
- Summer Sizzler...Men Only by Dalaney.
1300 points, ended August 14, 2008, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Another lovely write. How could I have missed your writings until today? You have amazing flow here. A real pleasureful write. Pen on...~Poo~
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"Oh yes baby, I feel your waves of love
crashing against my body." - these lines are quite cliched and not very poetic. i would definately take out the 'oh yes, baby' ....lolol.
"Feel my jets of passion
massage your body in our
jacuzzi of love."
I do like the metaphor used in those lines, however, I feel they are a little overdone
...the whole poem feels like a bit too much erotic melodrama.
Maybe it is that you are such a stud
thanks so much for this entry
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Beautifully written and felt from the heart good write
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Very sensual and sizzling indeed! Phew! Enjoyed this my friend!
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Mr. Love jones!
Now u go bbbooooooyyyee!! very nice homie!
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Tender Romance
this really sparks a Muse in me
Great imagery my friend. Wishing you well in the contest.
ephiphany
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