It's 2AM, there's no other cars within miles of us
Cruising around looking for a spot to park and stare at the storm
looking at my passenger seat, seeing her stare back smiling
Those big blue-green eyes, making the night brighter than ever
Breathtaking
We've found the spot we've been yearning for
An empty parking lot surrounded by forestry and streetlights
I park the car and turn off the ignition slowly
Letting out a sigh of relief, grabbing ur hand to hold
Pulling off our seatbelts we move closer, hugging tightly
Momentous
Looking at the rain hit the tar, listening to the thunder
We don't say a word to each other, just staring out the window
Nothing could ruin this moment for us, it was ours forever
Leaning over to kiss her on her forehead as she leans on my chest
I never want to leave and I know she doesn't want to either
Tranquility
Suddenly something came over me as she asks me what's wrong
Something is going to happen tonight that will change our lives forever
What it was, I had no idea but my heart started to skip a beat
The storm got more intense, beating down on the hood of the car
The lighting shot over the sky so bright, it blinded my vision
Ominous
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We hear a roaring, but it isn't the thunder; confused
As I look around I hear a car speeding into our parking lot
They park and come out, walking hastily over to my ride
My windows aren't tinted, they can see us as they grin devilishly
The man pulls out a pistol from the left side of his leather jacket
Frightened
As he demands me to lower the car window, I do it slowly
He said he would shoot if I started the ignition, so I couldn't
Both me and her were too scared stiff to even move or cry
he demands our wallets, cell phones and anything else we have worth it
He must've came off a robbery before; this parking lot is great to hide
Convict
He looks past me at her, licking his lips admiring her beauty
I knew what he was thinking; he shortly after demanded her to get out
I tried to talk him down as he pointed the gun at us both
He negotiated that he would leave if he could have sex with her
I'd never let that happen if my life depended on it, no matter what
Damnable
He take my car keys from me and tells me to shut my mouth, or else
We saw a glint of fear in his eyes, he didn't want to shoot anybody
She was about to get out, go to his car; assured me she'd be ok...over my dead body
I struggle to keep her in the car as the man panics heavily...BOOM
The gun accidentally goes off sending a shell through my back
Stunned
The man drops the gun and everything in his hands and runs off scared
Getting in his car, he drives away at an extremely fast speed
My body leaned over into her arms face forward, blood splattered everywhere
She begins to scream, as my dead body is now in her arms; irony
I would never let anyone touch her, I'd take that bullet 1000 times over
Love
She remains in shock, touching the part of my back that was shot
With the blood on her hands she screams my name as the thunder quietens
She knew I loved her and that I would always protect her; my life was hers
In that car, in that parking lot; our last ride as two people
For now we are one, her body and my spirit; I am and will forever be...her
Angel
I promise.
Author notes
A dream I had this morning...it was so vivid...light and dark in the same dream...when she let off her final scream during my last stanza that's when I woke up in a sweat...tears in my eyes too. I love Lisa more than anything and I will never...EVER let anyone hurt her. I will do whatever it takes, I'd kill someone to protect her. Everyone has something that they would protect with their life...this is mine.
I hope you all enjoy my dream...feedback and opinions appreciated...
A contest entry
- personal by Melissa Gayle.
800 points, ended July 24, 2008, 20 entries
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Comments
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wow
powerful,sad but hopeful,I like it thanks for entering! -
Wow.. Very very good!
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What can I say?
masterpiece! this literally made me cry. I was thinking while reading OMG! this did not really happen to you. I could see each and every event as it took place, I could see the storm and the car. absolutely great and I'm glad it was only a dream. best of luck in the contest.

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Wow I love this. It's very vivid
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Quite a vivid dream, the only thing critically that I would say is to spell out all the words and not use chatspeak.
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*sniffles*
Made me tear too. It's a very vivid piece, certainly struck a cord in me. Whether or not I like it I'm not sure...
However, if you were looking to made people feel, I think you've acheived it well.
It's such a sad story. Though I must say if I was in her place I'd be hurt more from your death.
Altogether, it's a very emotional piece. It holds a lot of love but it's not something that's very pleasant to think of.
~cheers
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um...wow...i have tears in my eyes...what an intense dream...but i would have done the same as the girl in your dream...id have the same thought as you, never let anyone hurt you...this is such an emotional dream...just picturing you at the end...i get shivers...
i dont like it...one bit.
as a poem though...its really good...structure works well, very suspenseful...great job...




