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New Tattoo

Buzzing of a needle
Riding up my skin
Outlines a picture of my life
My new tattoo
Colours run threw
Pink,yellow and red
Blue, sliver and gold
The needle draws on my skin
Pain down my spin
A new picture on my wall
My new tattoo
The hours pain
May go on for hours
But my new tattoo
Will last a life time
My new tattoo

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  • In The Twilight
    November 18, 2008
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    i don't think i have ever read a poem describing a tattoo...an interesting read.


  • Bosiarbooger gold member
    July 22, 2008

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    Very good

    Something nice for a change I see no doom and gloom it was an enjoyable read. "The hours pain May go on for hours" try changing one of the hours otherwise I thought it was delightful (you asked)tThank you Boog


  • JaydinC
    July 22, 2008

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    Nicely done

    once again lovely lovely poem. My one and only critism would be using hours twice in the same stanza. Maybe 'the hours of pain may seem like forever'
    otherwise I would've like to see the tattoo with your words, but then again I like using my imagination