Into the darkness
Of each waking hour
I swallow my soul again
Leaving thoughts of light
Far behind.
I spent too long on a journey
Towards the sun.
I left you behind.
You know not what I have become.
You wouldn't like me anyway.
I can't feel myself think anymore.
There is only light in my darkness
And only then it is pain.
Nothing but empty spaces remain.
I can hardly recall my own face when I look in the mirror.
Shatter the glass to help me see!
Suck the blood from my veins!
Into darkness I will remain
As I slowly die.
@GGG2008
A contest entry
- Darkness by HiddenByTheDark.
330 points, ended July 23, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Silence Within Darkness by Deathwolf Tasagka.
1800 points, ended July 24, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Dark, The Dead, And the Hopelessly Romantic. by Demonic Beauty.
450 points, ended October 16, 2008, 29 entries
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i think your emotions came out in this one i read it twice lovely .xoxox
vanna -
Good write.
Not so creepy, yes...but more on what you feel inside...negative thoughts maybe.The dark side within your soul?
Summer51
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O.o' I Like This One.
I like the way you made the feelings stand out in it.
Its not Scary As Such But.
Its quite... I cant think of a word...
Hmm.. Like... Creepy... in a way that isnt creepy at all O.o;
Great Write, <3
And Thankyou for entering =] -
AMAZING!!! i love this poem the passion and feelings are so powerful.. good luck in the contest
♥always Kate -
Oh my this is chillingly effective and a little disturbing yet very well written. All of this is most certainly enhanced by the use of the present tense and I think this unnerves me.. Like the way it directly addresses its subject , clever write. Thanks for sharing.
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