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We made animal love

in every room
in the garage
the garden
in the cellar
on the roof
on the porch
in the boathouse
on the river
in the marsh
by the beach
on the beach
at sunrise
sunset
the dead of night
under the stars
meteor showers
in the rain
in the hurricane
in her Jeep
in my truck
in front of the TV
listening to the radio
in bed with the dog
the cat
birds sang

alligators bellowed
sirens rang through the night
the old city stirred
shook off the moss
danced the macarana

this is just the trailer
the movie hasn't been released

 

 

 

 

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  • ennovy silver member
    May 8

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    Then make the movie I would enjoy this flick and you are the star.....I adore your style of writing this piece...so glad you won a silver but to me it was golden....excellent poem...novy


  • a59teeth
    March 28
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    well titled

    and very clever!! i enjoy reading poems that are so aptly titled...interesting preview there!!

  • truembrace
    August 22, 2008
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    I certainly couldn't help smiling when I got to the end of this one -- and such an evil grin sort of little smile it was with imagining the "deviancy" of that Trailer.

    Hope all is well. Loved this one. It certainly fits the title for the contest and gave all a stir or two (or three) I'm sure.

  • Virgoan
    August 20, 2008

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    The piece just paints a smile and open a gallery of humour in my mind - revealing and very very much we can relate to.

    A winner indeed sir.

    Thanks for sharing your gift.


    HENSLEY

  • tara wilson gold member
    August 14, 2008
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  • Dalaney gold member
    August 3, 2008
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  • tara wilson gold member
    August 2, 2008
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    lolol...it is always funny having sex with animals in the room, I prefer not to...but it has happened to me before, unfortunately..lololol...

    anyways, this is well done, the pacing [editing] is nice & fast like a movie trailer, lots of snippets.

    I love the birds sang, alligators bellowed, I like the humor as well as creativity with this - great poem, thanks so much for your entry


  • MindOphelia
    July 31, 2008

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    A very funny mix of slightly beautiful and no nonsense. It could be nostalgic, but the end makes it not, and very worthwhile!
  • Cinnarry gold member
    July 29, 2008
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    god I need to get laid. Seriously.

    • Dalaney gold member
      August 3, 2008
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      lol...just found this comment and i burst out laughing....oh, sweetie, i will PRAY that you
      get laid soon


      Ariosto...me thinks you touched
      more than nerves here with this poem

  • Cup-a-Joe silver member
    July 28, 2008
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    David

    How preverted are you??
    Quote~in bed with the dog~

    Kick that dog out of the bed..lol
    Joe


  • Allyce May
    July 28, 2008

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    Oh crikey! This is fabbbbbbb!!!!

    "shook off the moss
    danced the macarana"

    lol, that is priceless SWEET LOVE, renew thy force!


  • kiwigirljacks
    July 26, 2008

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    Well gosh! I feel exhausted after just the preview! lol. I feel a bit ripped off I paid the full price for the movie tho! OK.. I'm kidding! lol

    I actually think this is brilliant! Kind of tongue-in-cheek in a way yet still a sizzler!


  • silverfish
    July 24, 2008

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    i like your poetry; it annoys me that you write well AND have gainful employment as an artist with a brush and paint. -s


  • malmadre gold member
    July 23, 2008
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    Images are flashing through my mind, this will be a blockbuster for sure, sold out!


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    July 23, 2008

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    Very entertaining, a most
    Interesting bit of poetry
    And I loved the
    Great delivery with a
    Replete and full
    Apprising of a sensual subject.


    All the best,
    mj.


  • just mercedes gold member
    July 22, 2008
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    Great! A list poem! I'm stuck on line 26. lol.


  • sheltered
    July 22, 2008
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    Excellent

    Love the way this builds and flows.

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