It was two days after you said "I love you."
I felt like you had said, "BOO!"
I could hardly believe it
That you would even admit it.
But this day two years ago,
I finally had a beu.
You said something that melted my heart,
I almost didn't feel very smart!
I could hardly believe
That you could conceive
Those words from your lips.
It was so wonderful that I did quite a few skips.
You told me I was beautiful,
And I knew this wasn't bull.
You loved me for me
So I just couldn't disagree.
My darling on November 29, 2006,
There were absolutely no conflicts.
I love you forever,
So don't say "Whatever."
Author notes
I had to end this upruptly, so i think the end is kinda weird. Oh this is option #1. I hope this is good. I never win anything in contests! lol... but still, judge fairly!
A contest entry
- What's the Sweetist Thing Anyone Has Ever Done For You Love? by Immortalbeauty.
1000 points, ended August 7, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
How do you like it? Let me know if there's anything to fix!
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Wow thast really great. The only little thing thats a bit anoyying is the last line in every verse. It feels a bit forced to me and doesnt flow that great. I defenetly dont wright great myself but its just one thing i got to say abotu this poem. But apart from that its really sweet and nice
I love the use of a date as a title and tieing it in at the end.
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It's very sweet and I absolutely love it!
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awe, this is cute! it doesnt end weird- its fine. im glad you have that day to look back on and forward to. good luck in the contest
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Wow I have a poem called November 29, 2007! HOW WIERD! I don't know if you read it...it's different than this but it has the same font and background too! WOW!
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Nice write. I like how you portrayed the story. Heh, I remember that day really well, because me and you were standing outside the Reading Cottage, and we were talking about it.
Hang in there, chica!
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