I'd like to be a vampyre please,
Take my mind off this pain,
Day after day,
Unending agony.
My Blood is burning and scortching everything in its path.
Look me in the eyes and see
The darkness flood your seduction away
Pull me down and away from the light and hope from the World.
I'd like to be a vampyre please.
I'm at the end of time
You grab my naked neck and your crack white lips pull back over shining daggers
You bite me and my essence is drained.
My souless body becomes bloodless and dry.
I'm claimed yours in soo many ways.
Trying to fight off belief and new thoughts
I'd like to be a vampyre please
A creature of the night stalking to recruit into a unforgivable sanctuary of unliving dead.
Tasting blood for the first time. the sweet bittery red taste.
My heart beats the final beat and you smile
My fresh drawn blood drips its last drop and you come closer
Your journey is complete
I'm by your side now and always
I'm a vampyre now
Taken my mind off this pain
Everyday and every night
The everlasting agony
ends............
A contest entry
- Dead Poet's Society (the awakening) by Dark Otter.
1000 points, ended July 23, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Come all Vampire lovers by okadadokie.
650 points, ended August 3, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
wat is the feeling in this poem? wat can i do differently?
Comments
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I would love to be a vampire as well. Great job.
~Oka/KC -
Wonderful take!
Suicide by vampyr! Tis a wonderful thought. I like this first person perspective. If you had gone the distance with it, made it deeper, darker and longer, it would've been trophy material. I wanted your character and the vampires to be stronger. Names and description and more action would have nailed it. I wanted the moment to bleed into eternity. I wanted 'your self realization' of the undead to spring from your transformation. But even with those shortcomings, I still like the creative twist you put on your work. Anything that has an unique 'taste' is worth a second read. Thanks for your entry!
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