Throw the pearls before the swine
take my love I've left behind
not worthy of my attention
it's all past, did I stop to mention?
I found out about the two of you
sneaking around like lovers do
meeting in clandestine places
cover your evidence, but I found traces.
So now I'm ending this charade
was on a pedestal, love on parade
the grim truth has now set in
love's perfection not reality again.
Now my heart shattered from this break
how to piece together much more than I can take
smiles and laughter have turned to gloom
share my heart again?..ahhh...there is no room.
Protected and guarded from now I'll be
perfection turned devastation blindsided did not see
heart with a fortress never be the same
life without love ends this pathetic game.
Author notes
hope there is enough emotion in this one for you...
A contest entry
- emotions needed. by etoile.
450 points, ended July 23, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Show Me Your Best! by xCandieKissesx.
450 points, ended August 6, 2008, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
honesty please...
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I really like this. It's very emotional.
"Throw the pearls before the swine"
I like the anger in the first line, but you don't exactly find out it's anger until you read the rest. :] Very different.
"I found out about the two of you
sneaking around like lovers do
meeting in clandestine places
cover your evidence, but I found traces."
I think people who cheat definitely are swine V.V They make me so mad >.< Your poem is really great and perfectly describes the emotions felt when you find out something so horrid. Great write. ^_^
-Lily♥
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Lily,
thank you so much for your kind comment..
blessings..
namaste..
r
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Emotion!
Beautiful. I was definately feeling the emotion and depth in this piece! My favourite part was:
Now my heart shattered from this break
how to piece together much more than I can take
Very powering lines! Great job and good luck!
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the emotion is well done
but i didn't like the rhyming much, it just wasnt done as well as i hoped.
Protected and guarded from now I'll be
perfection turned devastation blindsided did not see
heart with a fortress never be the same
life without love ends this pathetic game.
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i thought there was something off about this stanza.
So now I'm ending this charade
was on a pedestal, love on parade
So the grim truth has now set in
love's perfection not reality again.
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i liked that stanza though. especially your imagery which is well done throughout the entire poem
thanks for the entry and goodluck
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i don't like the rhyming. it was forced and it didn't flow well.
however, i liked the subject and the ideas & the emotion
so props for that
thanks for entering! -
I like this. Rhymes well. Its a good read. And hopefully this didn't happen to you. It's bad when a lover cheats on you.
Hugs,
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thanx so much for your kind comment..
blessings..
namaste..
robin
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