A dark storm whirls around
Eroding away firm ground.
Shackled inside her mind
Where none can ever find.
This is her cross to bear.
No one will find her there.
Author notes
Pic prompt-found on google-artist unknown
A contest entry
- Dark Pic Prompt by Carolina Moon.
450 points, ended July 23, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow.... so few words.... so much said..... my life to the end........ a cross i can not bare........ thanks for sharing this and good luck......
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I am glad you liked this one. I thought that you would be able to relate to it. Your comments are appreciated.
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Great poem! I like the metamophoric impression that you took upon the picture. Frankly when I saw it i did not know what approach to take. But your's is just perfect! I really do no see any other significance to this picture than to illustrate the conflicts of her mind. Being exposed to a storm unable to move and save herself because she has a cross to bear that's hers. She's chained to it.
Incredible poem! I love what you did to it, its simply marvelous!
mila
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I am glad you enjoyed the poem. I agree there was little else to say unless you wanted to bash the Christian religion. I do not bash religions. Whether I agree with them or not, it is not my place to stomp on someones faith.
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I completely agree! One should be tolerable to other people's religion, who am I to impose my views on anybody.
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It's awesome, a short yet powerful message. The first line was hard to swallow but i loved everything else. I really like the darkness surrounding the message...good job Woodchuck4400.
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Thank you for reading and commenting. There was an "s" missing in the first line.
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wow im in shock
this is the most amazing short dark write I've ever read.. for real!
I loved it.. good luck in the contest cuz!
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I am glad you liked it. I couldn't believe I said all I wanted to that quickly.
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I get so many deep meanings from this..excellent write. Thank you so much for your entry.
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Great imagery and metaphor
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Thank you. I am glad you enjoyed the poem.
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