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rainbows

Rainbows rainbows are made for me

All seven colours that i see

I see them after  the wet rainfall

Now they can be big or very small


Below the ground  and over a city 

 

I look at them and there so pretty 


When i see them i am never sad

So rainbows rainbows for them i an glad

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  • queen Greeters member
    July 23

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    welcome to all poetry

    Hi bree-star

    This is a beautiful poem, rainbows are pretty special you did a great job on this poem please keep writing, reading and commenting
    Barbara
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  • BookGirl
    July 23

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    I love your thoughts on rainbows! It's such a happy little poem, that just reading it makes a person feel light-hearted.
    Here are a few suggestions: Line 1 - how about "Rainbows, rainbows..."? (comma between the two 'rainbows')
    Line 2: "All seven colours that I see" (capitalize "i" because it is the pronoun "I")
    Line 6: "I look at them and they're so pretty" (change there to they're)
    Line 7: Two "i's" that should be capitalized
    Line 8: "So rainbows, rainbows, for them I am glad" (commas added, "i" capitalized, and "am" instead of "an")
    Thanks for sharing this sweet poem!