Held down by The cross she bares
Tears no longer Able to shed
For life she No longer cares
The waves crashing,Hoping soon to be dead
Life is not So simple
Even when she Begs and prays At The Temple
A contest entry
- Dark Pic Prompt by Carolina Moon.
450 points, ended July 23, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be kinder than necessary, for everyone you meet is fighting some kind of battle!
Comments
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hi ,
i like the idea of this very much, short and to the point...i will be back without a doubt to read more of you. like your style
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Wow sissy.. you really did a wonderful job!!! I really liked where you went with this prompt! you put so much emotion into this sissy.. You really did a wonderful job!!!
Angel
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Hoodwinked
A very amazing picture and good poem to go with it. Great imagery, rhyming, and all in all a beautiful poem. Good luck in the contest dear poet. Keep it up.
Always write from the heart
Never give up
Kate
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Hood-Winked
A good write and interpretation of the picture. Good imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Nice depth of feeling. Very nice rhythm. Vivid descriptives. Well penned. You have been Hood-Winked by a member of The Poetic Bandits.
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Hood-Winked
Hey there very nice take on hte picture I wish you much luck in this contest best wishes and much love always keep smiling
Love you
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Those crosses can indeed be heavy! And no, life is never simply, I hope you can find some light tho hun!
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Hood-Winked!
I like this poem - I was wondering if the way you have used 'bares' is a play on words? If so, I like it, especially in relation to the picture
it also seems like you have two lines on one in this piece - with the capitalisation and such, which is a little confusing when reading - but I really like the effect of the imagery that you have crafted in this poem well done
Keep writing
Polly
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You have been HOOD WINKED by The Poetic Bandits. This is your day in the spotlight - enjoy. THis is quite the picture prompt for this contest. Liked the interpretation you have chosen for it. Easy to read; good flow, and interesting rhythm and rhyme.
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HOOD`WINKED!!!
well written. wonderful imagery. filled with emotions. thank you for sharing your amazing talent. keep writing! God bless you always
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nicely done sis.. much power and feeling inflicted... loved it! good luck!
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Well written with a feeling of deep sadness. I hope you see brighter days. Thank you for your entry.
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This is a great job. It is the best in the contest. You really have done and excellent job. It fits the prompt perfectly.
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