We began just as an act
no more secrets or lies
just be open with our eyes
no more holding back
or looking where we are at
no more tender glances
just straight forward answers
no more awkward hugs
or tentative looks
we say no more,
since we have both been there before...
Author notes
i hate ed
A contest entry
- Love me, hate me, it's all the same to me!!!! by HeartBr8ker.
400 points, ended August 22, 2008, 17 entries
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Comments
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This is a great poem. But please read the rules. I don't want to DG you...
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Verity, I dig this poem, but i think it starts a bit abruptly. So that when you've read it all your a bit unsure on what it's a bit about. My opinion. Great job though. Keep writing! -M
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very well expressed
the ending was great
you've wrote about something that many people are all too familiar with
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I know how it feels, when forbidden-love is no longer forbidden, free to breathe in all it's darkened decadence. Love is a beautiful thing.
Laura x -
Great poem here! I love the last stanza. I think this is how a lot of people feel a lot of the time. I enjoyed reading this!!!!
Warmest,
Mylee -
Thanks for the comment and yours is really great too! I like the revelation at the end its like you slowly build up to it. nice work!
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wow...this is a good write...
the flow is really good...
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