Marriage through the years, our passion
changed from teddies to pullover flannel
night shirts. Prayers, and desire renew
memories of youth at Bamberton Beach where
life moves slow as soft clouds on a summer sky.
We travel by bicycle from cove side cottage
to sandy beach bay for picnics. Boys fish
from pebble covered shoreline, large sunfish
caught will be baked in lemon sauce for dinner.
Trees cut and left to dry for loggers recovery
next spring lay about.
The wind blows through tree branches
with gentle sway to expose those few
house roofs seen on this shore, and
the boats rock against the dock.
Arm-in-arm we sit on the porch swing
to watch a big orange sunset, mirrored
on the lake as twlight approaches.
A contest entry
- emotions needed. by thunder.xx.paradise.
450 points, ended July 23, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i enjoyed this.
Marriage through the years, our passion
changed from teddies to pullover flannel
night shirts.
very nice
i like the line breaks & the whole flow of the piece.
good jobbbb! -
a good poem penned, a soft and gentle poem here i find, it makes me think of happiness, being content with life and love, enjoying the sand beneath the feet and the rides. i especially like the ending with twilight as it says not only the end of the day but the twilight years too.
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Good Morning
This was certainly full of emotion and beautiful imagery. You take me back to a happier time in my life. Young couple full of hopes and dreams. Sounds like you were blessed finding lasting love. Thank you for sharing. Hope this wins. It is beautiful!!! Take care my friend.
Bless You,
Sandy
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Excellent
What a great creation full of emotions. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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i loved the imagery in this. it really painted a picture in my mind, however i was looking for more sad writes and to me this is emotional but not as depresing as i would like.
We sit arm-in-arm on the porch swing
to watch sunset; a big orange, mirrored on
the lake as twlight approaches
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i like the image of the sun as an orange and a few other images in the poem as well
however you have a couple grammatical errors which could easily be fixed if you quickly reread it.
thanks for the entry and goodluck
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Outstanding
This is a poem filled with happy memories and you made me think back to memories of my youth- mainly holidays in Cornwall. I thought the imagery in this poem was excellent. You really have brought this place alive for everyone to enjoy.
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Room without doors
I am glad this bring a smile to you and share thoughts of love that blooms in our youth and share those moments of passion and recall them in laughter.
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