They say a penny saved is a penny earned
I'd never really understood that
I found a coin once at the side of a road
And I grasped to hold onto that
Cash is too typical, but this coin was pure
Something I had to keep, and why? I'm still not sure
I know I could've let go but at the time I could not
Swore that, "I'd grasp this coin with all that I've got"
My eyes are drawn sad now, my smile not in place
My coin has developed rust on it lately
I don't hold it so closely anymore, it's soiled
It seems I've given up on it lately
I know that this coin was one of a kind
A wedge of epic proportions, a little piece of mind
I toss it aside, and hope for it's redefinition
A loss of that hope I once had, a loss of ignition
Author notes
For the contest I'm entering, hopefully you'll be able to understand this. I think you will.
For the rest of you, read it as you will. I wrote it a certain way, but maybe you'll read it as another. That would make it beautiful
A contest entry
- Taste of Romance by Reptile Lady by Reptile Lady.
475 points, ended July 23, 2008, 22 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think, and be honest! ^_^ I'm not scared of criticism, I love it!
Comments
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i honestly got goosebumps from that!
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I loved this piece..
Why because between the lines the hopes and dreams are shattered.
Love lost, the indecision, the way forward, is there a light you ask yourself.
Creative and sad
Thank you for your entry and best wishes
Julie xx
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That was philisophical(sp?) but kinda well, difficult to grasp the concept of the poem's premse. What are trying to say? That money shouldn't be wasted or what? I still like the poem though.
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It's less of a message to someone else as to how to, it's a way that I've dealt with my... penny. Not making any note as to whether or not I've dealt with it in a positive way or a negative way, but the confusion that I'm left with in wake of it.
I'm sure that made no sense, too. It's interpretive.
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