S till & deep in the silence of my mind
E nergies are repressed
A ctuality looking to be expressed,
R ecessive genes looking to impress
C hurning & yearning, my desires cause burning;
H eart longing for fulfillment,
I ntensities build
N eeding to feed on artistic delights,
G iving vent to all in my life
O nward I stride,
N ever giving up on my dreams ‘til I die
T ime is fleeting,
O ld age creeping
W onders I still behold,
I nsights magnified;
N ever to be satisfied, I’m seeking to be whole
Words: K.Botka
7/22/08
Author notes
I use Word & it can drive me crazy when I count on it to count lines cause it includes everything on the page! I've 16 lines of verse to be exact! I had to change the acrostic a couple of times before I got it right. Hope I fulfilled all the requirements! This is in a sense my mini-autobiography. I went through some intense changes as I was writing this. Thanks for this contest Storm.
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This is beautifully uplifting. And I love acrostics. You wrote this very well and I enjoyed the feeling from reading it. Thank you for entering and good luck. Storm
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This is a exhilirating read, the tempo and rythym moves the reader right along. You cover a lot of ground in this write but it was a good trip! Your acrostics just keep getting better and better!
Dennis
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Killer first line! It flows on beautifully to an ending as powerful as the start. I'm not generally fond of acrostics (especially MIRROR acrostics) but I liked this one. Great work!
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That can be the toughest thing, holding on to one's dreams until one no longer breathes. Just my opinion, but the separation of first letters interrupts the flow and is a bit distracting. Otherwise, I have to say that the last three lines are the most powerful of the piece. Truly a hope on which to hold!
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I love acrostics but find I am not good at them., This one is good, it does have the feel of a bio, lines ten and eleven are telling of the writer, as does the last one,it flows nicely and is easy to read.
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It is difficult to do but you pull it off.
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I really like the rhythm of the piece - it flows really well and has such a beautiful and strong message contained within I love the way you have used an acrostic - I think it fits really well and you have done wonderfully - best of luck in the contest!
Keep writing
Polly
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Liked the way you worded this acrostic. Can imagine the trouble you had with the author comments you gave - takes some effort at times to get it just right. Sentiments well expressed in these lines - wishing you well in this contest.
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This is very moving in a way Kath. I sensed you had put a lot of yourself into it. It is a great mantra for being positive in life. Good contest entry!
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