My last breath
vapors exhale bodies' final rattle
Those that I have loved,
a neurotic delusion?
A projection of forgiveness
when “sorry” failed
I reach for me
I walk away
No induced haze
An admission of annihilation
For I am you and you are me
Lain upon the field of love’s battle
I bury my past
willingly, for just the scent of you
A contest entry
- Interpretation of Image/ 15/20 by imahealer.
750 points, ended August 5, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I truly loved the content of your verse. "I reach for me/ I walk away" Very astute interpretation. The second half of your poem is the very strongest, delivering great imagery. The first part is missing a couple of critical punctuations.i.e. "bodies" is missing an apostrophe. After "loved" there should be a comma. I got chills as I imagined your soul walking away in defeat! Thank you so much for your entry and best wishes.
Linda
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