Exposed, my heart lies bleeding,
unfulfilled was love's destiny.
Rain clouds off in the distance,
stole the sunshine away from me.
Wrapped in warmth of friendship,
baring my soul I ran to you.
Into the safety of your arms,
mid the rain friendship grew.
Thunder heard off in the distance,
my teardrops are falling like rain.
Naked, the pain rips into my soul,
me loving you now seems in vain.
As raindrops fall I sit and ponder,
of sweet things said I now wonder.
Where they of truth or of lies,
should I stay or just say goodbye.
Sit drowning in my falling tears.
as the rain and dark sky nears.
Through blinded eyes I can not see.
if my heart can ever set you free.
In a list
A contest entry
- Rain. Rain. Rain. by rosie4491.
450 points, ended August 7, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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the distance storm clouds are the re-emergence of times, which hit home as if the storm erupted. To far to do some damage but always remaining overcast with either angst of memory. A lovely drama you've put into this.
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Wonderful Comment
Hello Tony, It is always a pleasure when you stop by and read my poetry. You always bring a smile too. I appreciate your thoughts on my poems. Always an honor to read them.
I hope all is well with you across the big pond. 
Take care.
Blessings,
Sandy
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Ah, tis another fine poignant write. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Your title reminded me of an old song, with which you may very well be familiar:
http://www.stlyrics.com/lyrics/forrestgump/raindropskeepfallingonmyhead.htm
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Raindrops_Keep_Fallin'_on_My_Head -
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Good Morning!!
Thank you for this wonderful comment my friend. A nice way to start my day. You take care and have a beautiful day.
Bless You,
Sandy
Yes I do know that song. I love it. I remember it from the movie. Liked all BJ's songs back then. -
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You are quite welcome.
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Each new heart is a stepping stone
To carry us along on the road of life. Take the love that is offered. A gift is a wonderful thing. Love is the gift to move us along to the end. Not always meant to stay, just move us along the way...mac
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Lovely Comment
Good morning my sweet friend. I hope you are feeling well today. My prayers are flying over to you, catch them. They are full of hugs and smiles too. Thank you for this wonderful and caring comment. You take care.
Blessngs,
Sandy
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Whoa. *whisper*
Very haunting words, Sandy. I have seen my share of days like these, & you described them perfectly. Well done.
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Wonderful Comment
Good morning dear Jaime. Nice to read a great comment from my sweet nephew. Always a pleasure when you pop in. You take care. Hugs and Smiles
Bless You,
Aunt Sandy
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DEEPLY HEARTFELT!!!!
I know to me rainy days just heighten the sad and down feelings I am having.
Even if there is nothing wrong rainy days just make me feel sad and depressed.
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Thank You Kevin
Good Morning my friend. I hope you are well and enjoying whats left of the sumer. Sems to be going by so quickly. Your comment was very nice and most appreciated. You take care. Hugs and Smiles,
Sandy
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I think this shows so well the contrast between "love" and "lust", and I like how you tie in teardrops with the rain. Some people say rain is GOD'S tears over sinful man's destruction, since "God is love" (1 John 4:8)
My favorite stanza and the one that stands out the most is: "As raindrops fall, I sit and ponder,
of sweet things said I now wonder.
Were they of truth or of lies,
should I stay or just say goodbye?"
Powerfully honest! Another great write Sandy!
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Great Comment
Thank you Stephen for the lovely comment. Your words and thoughts are always uplifting and encouraging. Thasnk you for stopping by and reading. Hugs and smile dear brother. You take care.
Blessings to you,
Sandy
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Awsome penning, for the prompt. The rhyme is nicely done. The quatrain work well, and the flow moves from stanza to stanza with ease and intensity. Great ending-Through blinded eyes I can not see. If my heart can ever set you free. Love is blind and unable to let it go. Great entry, good luck with the contest.
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Wonderful Coment Dear Friend!!
Hello Dan, So nice to see you on.
Oh Rain was always so romantic to me. Whether it be sad or happy love, it is full of emotions. Cools down the fiery passion it brings out or it can wash away the saddness of pain. Yes rain, oh beautiful rain.
You take care. Hugs and Smiles.
Bless You,
Always,
Sandy
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