every person harbors two
actual and internal
moral and intentional
and it goes on this way
forever
which is why i cannot explain
to anyone
even you
how i love so deeply
but lie alone at night
my insides turned out
for your hands
your eyes
alone
only
to be left
over
and always
with the incessant thoughts
of never good enough
and almost got there
but never quite
far enough to accomplish
anything
without you
Author notes
9. Inside and Out
In a list
A contest entry
- Semi-Quickie Title Prompts by xxRainbowDawnxx.
300 points, ended July 25, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wow, our writings are semi-similar.
I really like this one, great job
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definately relate, very expressive and deep, it always seems to happen to me.
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Great write!
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oh man. How I think everyone can relate to this poem. Or at least I can. Beautiful work. The first and last stanzas stand out to me. the first because I just love the wording and find it true. the last because its penning what Ive took a dozen or so poems to not really capture.
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awww. your pieces kick ass and sometimes you think it is not getting across something that you are trying to convey... know that everyone takes poetry and takes the pieces that mean something to them... so really maybe i captured something you were trying to get out but in all honesty... i am not sure what i meant... so ... keep writing... AiM
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