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Only I Can See...

Only I can see the purple,
The bruises you leave me with.
Only I can see the sorrow,
The pain you make me feel.
And only I can see why you do it,
Why you take it out on me.
Some people just don't understand.

You're angry,
Wild eyes.
And I know better than to cry.
As your blows land,
My vision blackens,
I see only in red.
Instinct kicks in.
I make the mistake:
I fight back.

Only I can see your sorrow,
Why you do what you do.
Only I can see that,
At least this way,
You aren't taking it out on you.
And only I can see how sad you are,
When I'm finally awake.
Your apologies keep me around.

You act normally;
I know something is wrong.
I can hear it in your voice.
And see it in the way you look at me.
I don't anticipate the punch.
I couldn't see the kick.
I was blind to the knife
As it cut across my skin.

Only I can see the scars
That decorate my skin.
Only I can see the blood...

Only I can see
Why you are the way you are.
I did something...

My eyes open;
I am on the floor.
My heart skips a beat
As you start pounding me once more.
The pain is unbearable;
My head is slammed back.
Spots fight to dominate my eyes.
I can't remember where I'm at.

I feel the IV in my arm,
The oxygen tube in my nose.
Before I open my eyes,
I know.
I see a white room,
Two people standing there.
My thoughts are racing,
Broken,
Fading.

Only I can see why you did it,
Why you injured me so.
Only I can see,
That's why I had to go.
Your efforts didn't work.
I'm still alive.
I'm coming back to you.

I knock on your door;
It's open,
So I enter.
I go to where it all started,
And see you lying there,
Your eyes closed,
Your wrists bleeding,
A note beside your hand.

"Only you knew why I hurt,
Only you saw my pain.
I took it all out on you.
You shouldn't love me.
In time,
It will all heal,
The bruises,
The scars.
My death will protect you.
Always know I love you.
I never meant for this..."

I fall to my knees,
Screaming your name.
My heart is no more,
It's lost in the rain.
The razor is beside you;
My hand closes around it.

Something so soft,
So gentle was said.
I was sure you were dead.
But your chest rose and fell,
You heart was still beating...

"I love you;
I'm sorry,"
It was weak,
But it was there.
I felt tears rolling down my face.
Felt our lips meet one last time.

Only I saw you die.
Only I can know why.
I took your note,
Treasure it still.

Only I could see how much you loved me,
So much you would die to protect me.
Only I can see...

The razor is in my hand,
Only I can see its love.
I can see your face before me,
As I slice what once was.

Author notes

Option ONE.
"Heaven's not a place that you go when you die, it's the moment in life when you actually feel alive."

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  • the evil angel
    January 20
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    Haha just kidding! Already commented on this one. So... You can just reread my comment if you want.

  • DramaQueen469 Greeters member
    October 24, 2008

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    Oh, my God.

    This is unbelievable. I am so impressed - this held me spellbound.

    WELL DONE and thankyou so much for entering.

    ~*~DramaQueen469~*~

  • sarajaneUK
    September 29, 2008
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    Generally, this is not my kind of poem, but this is very good. I love your line, ...scars that decorate my skin. I could see this as a song, though you would probably need to lose some of the lines. I love the repetition of 'only I', I would make that the title of the song! A really good write. Great stuff! sj


  • Dragonbabyx3 gold member
    September 29, 2008
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    This is a slap to reality, So much of this happens behind closed doors... Things that many people never want to hear. Much less experience. This is a brilliant piece of work. The only part I do not like, it you say "only" alot in the poem, I think you could do with a few less, Its a bit redundant. also you spelled Always wrong in line 80. Other than that, Its beautiful!AODP

  • lizwicker
    September 9, 2008

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    Wow

    I have chills and i want to cry! This hit home so much its insane...I have been with someone who was just like that altho it never got that bad i believe if i did not leave it would have!!! Wow this is just Amazing


  • Venus25
    September 9, 2008
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    Speechless!

    My death will protect you.

    That one line is concrete in my mind!

    Personally i feel this poem is a blatent "smack in the face" reality of what actually goes on behind closed doors! I love the way you portrayed love through abuse and the description of torture comes alive in this!

    Genius!

    Good luck!

  • the evil angel
    August 16, 2008
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    Finally! A poem that isn't cliche. Cliche poems can be good depending on the wording the poets use, but this is genius! thank you! It's alittle long... but it kind of has to be to be complete. You should work on the flow a little bit. It kind of stops in some places. In general, though, it's wonderful. Thank you for entering it

  • basket-case-loser
    July 22, 2008

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    Bloody hell that was amazing!like seriously just everything about it. I love that the title went all the way through!it was amazing great work!

  • the evil angel
    July 22, 2008
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    Sweet! i love rule followers! Will comment for realz later. :
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