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Your Love Still Burns Within

My mind begins to wander towards you in my thoughts,
as I sit alone amidst the nights' silent stillness
many memories held tight, spilling crystalline tears.
Spending hours throughout the nights, talking as one
sharing our deepest of thoughts and wishes together.

The moment I fell in love with you, I gave my heart,
thinking you had felt the same, with burning desire.
The Sunshine, once of your heart, beats intermittently
leaving a figment of nothingness left in the shadows of memories;
tears of losing you consumes me with each passing day...missing you.

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1- The Still burning embers of unrequited love

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  • Desire gold member
    July 23, 2008

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    Aaaaaaaaaaaw~

    Oh My this tugs at the Heart and the lines:
    The moment I fell in love with you, I gave my heart,
    thinking you had felt the same, with burning desire.
    Swells the eyes~
    Excellent take on the prompt Beautiful
    Keep that quill dancing~~
    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • maralisa silver member
    July 22, 2008

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    leaving a figment of nothingness left in the shadows of memories;tears of losing you consumes me with each passing day...missing you.wow a very deep powerful take on the promt full of strong emotions and some great imagery good luck in the contest


  • mysticstorm gold member
    July 22, 2008

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    I know how true this is for you and I am so sorry...haerts are shared in trust and shoulc never be used...Beautifully writtten and expressed...you soul is in this one and that makes it all the better...
    Wishing you the best in life and love...
    Love,
    sis


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    July 22, 2008

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    This is so sad yet it touches so closely on the feelings of a broken heart. These are feelings most of us have felt at one time or another. Your words touched this reader. Great job and good luck in the contest.
    Soulful Woman


  • luna-midnight gold member
    July 22, 2008

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    awwww, this is sad, wonderful take on the prompt and good luck
    thanks for entering and take care
    stephanie ♥


  • ShaShay
    July 22, 2008

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    Very touching write. It shows that it came straight from your heart. Nice flow and good message came across. Pen on...

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