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Lost

And I am uncertain
with the stained revelation
hidden in my reflected gaze
I look up into the maze of hearts,
touching with fingertips
that which will never be offered

I stand in the seasons with realization
that streaked crevices of loving lies
taint my skin with opened scars
The looking glass I have created
with retinas hidden behind the veil
of a smile left to the world's escape

While I trace the mounting loss of feeling
within the depths of my own categorized soul,
I close my eyes and whisper thoughts through ages,
and hear words deafened within me; taking me whole

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  • guitargirl73
    September 5

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    I can hardly describe how I feel about this poem, it blew me away! The dictionary might say something like...no longer found or whatever but this IS the real definition. Great job


  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    August 6

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    Wow. This is a powerful set of words. Deep in meaning and feeling. Great writing with this. Thank you for entering and good luck. Storm

  • BreathAlilLess
    July 25

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    Woahh

    this was amazing. completely blew me away.
    "While I trace the mounting loss of feeling
    within the depths of my own categorized soul,
    I close my eyes and whisper thoughts through ages,
    and hear words deafened within me; taking me whole "

    nothing left to say <3



  • Ken-Maverick gold member
    July 24

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    AMAZING

    I read it three times, its a wonderful write,
    "The looking glass I have created
    with retinas hidden behind the veil
    of a smile left to the world's escape"
    You have a gift my friend, and a special one at that.


  • til the day i die
    July 23

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    wow

    dude this is amazing and you write so beautifully...i felt what you felt while i read threw it....amazing

  • Iridessa MoonFlower gold member
    July 22

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    I really like the flow of this poem it was awesome. Totally deep! "I stand in the seasons with realization" I really like this line. It is like finding yourself. I love it. "The looking glass I have created" That was created is cool. It could be taken several ways. One side is we do create our own lives, it is our choice, whether we make it hard or not. What I am trying to say is that we as people can make ourselves feel really bad about ourselves. But we can also make ourselves closed up in to our own created bubble. Anyways maybe I am taking it wrong. This is just my opinion! In Love & Light... ♥ ~~Iridessa MoonFlower~~


  • IrishGypsyRose silver member
    July 22

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    Intense!

    The flow is silky and your metaphor and meter is fabulous. It definitely did blow me away with feeling and I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Great write dear. ~mandie~


  • solitarytear
    July 22
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    wow

    i loved it.......your work is truelly amazing

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