as shooting stars
pass their due
and fireflies forget
to show their magnificent glow,
I watch
thinking of how
you always shunned me
with eyes drained of expression
and hands which couldn't hold on
maybe deep down, you cared
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option1~
A contest entry
- Pif by luna-midnight.
450 points, ended July 23, 2008, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best Prewrites From July 2008 by amaranthine lover.
2800 points, ended November 18, 2008, 37 entries
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I kinda like the main idea of this.
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Oh My Word~
Oh~ this one packs a punch and Excellent take on the prompt
These lines swell the eyes~
thinking of how
you always shunned me
with eyes drained of expression
Oy!!
Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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with eyes drained of expression and hands which couldn't hold on maybe deep down, you cared a very deep and meaningful poem good luck in the contest
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well done with heartfelt expression - losing one we care for always bleeds tears of disdain when they dont return the feelings many blessings always xx
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i love this, its so lovely to read. would you tell me what prompt you used please? thanks
but thanks so much for entering and good luck
stephanie ♥
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