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Unfurl

Parched, I break through waves
The splash of your unbound hair
quenches my thirst.

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  • Nicolette gold member
    August 6, 2008
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    What a lovely, succinct piece of writing this is. I myself love short poetry and this one appeals to me – very much. You’ve managed to pack so much into this one – well done. I especially liked “the splash of your unbound hair” although I wanted to remove “unbound”.. don’t you think…? Anyway, this is a fine piece of writing!

    Thank you for this entry.


  • PageTurner
    August 2, 2008

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    They say "Brevity is the soul of wit"
    and you clearly demonstrated this



    So, you Unfurl girl!


    A Clear and Concise Write, Scribe.

    ~ Nicky♥