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There, I Softly Venture

 

 

 

 

In deep forest scented,

Your sweet tresses flow

As silver Spanish moss,

In moonlight does glow

 

With many a nuance

Reflecting gentility,

I’m captured by beauty

Asking, “How can it be?”

 

Designed to allure with

Much feminine pride,

You, graciously allow

My fingers to glide.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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A tight bit of rhyme I hope you find appealing.

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  • Nicolette gold member
    August 6, 2008

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    This is a good rhyming poem, Michael. I absolutely loved the first stanza – especially the way it falls on the ears, and of course, the image of “silver Spanish moss”. The next two stanzas are lovely too but somehow I wanted to stay with the images of the first one and wished you expanded a bit more on that theme. There is a wonderful softness about this poem and the use of natural images and metaphors is very appealing. Lovely poetry, my friend – loved the title too.

    Thank you for this entry.

    ~ Nicolette


  • Avendesora Dreamer
    July 24, 2008

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    I love it when rhyme flows like it was meant to be, not like it was forced, and so I love these words that you have penned...I like the image I got here..a common boy and a girl of higher class, meeting in the moonlight..

  • tara wilson gold member
    July 22, 2008

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    "Your sweet tresses flow
    As silver Spanish moss,"...beautiful imagery..


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    July 22, 2008

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    mmmmmmmmmm I loved your soft gentle rhyme in this. Just beautiful. A pleasure to read and enjoy. ~Pamela


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    July 22, 2008

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    Beautifully soft and sensual with an 'alluring' flow to your words.

    Best wishes in the contest.

    Love Margaret

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