They took what was his
tortured, terrorized
a frenzied attack of gang mentality,
unprovoked brutality; till
finally, she could no longer fight.
Death in murder her only escape
from the horrors of life;
imprisoned him in this nightmare.
A silent promise he made
an oath unto himself
for bittersweet revenge.
He stalked the night shadows
lethal weapons by his side.
Faceless, hooded and unseen
just his handiwork of slaughter
left laying bloodied in the gutter.
Hunted down, skillfully tormented
deliberately inflicting heinous
injuries, prolonging the suffering
payback for taking what was his.
A silent promise he made for revenge
no more taking what was not theirs to take…
Nowadays he spends his time in a padded cell
drawing pictures of cherry blossoms;
a mind destroyed by bittersweet revenge.
Author notes
Art link;
mountcope.files.wordpress.com/2007/10/revenge-one.
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Great write. The imagery here is amazing and I could practically see myself going through the motions. Like the ending, which throws out the hard reality that people often face after getting lost in their emotions.
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Excellent
Oh my what an incredible creation. You have do it so masterfully. Best of luck in the contest.
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Wow!!! This is terrific!! I like walking on the darks side as you well know and this is brilliant!! I wanted it to continue, but you ended it perfectly. Dayum you are so talented. Boy can my good bad girl write!!!!
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Totally just grabs the reader
and takes them on the journey ready or not, tells of the moment of glories revenge and the forever price, closing was perfect. good write
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A walk of passion into the dark shadows of a soul
Once left broken, Only to awaken like a beast in hell
Yet the sweet sighs called out, Revenge had been taken.
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Excellent. Revenge, vengence. Choice then justice.
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This is really really good, it does really grab you from the start, I particulary like the ending.
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Love the way this grips you by taking u to the beginning of the next line to conclude the sentencing, raw and uncut and directly emotional , good stuff
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Man what a powerful write
Reading this is wrenching. Just the thoughts of this coming up gives me the willies. Great job, very detailed. One of mooks classics. She always belts em out of here. Wonderful job.
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