Dark over casting mind.
Inside I feel when I breathe.
My life is shining.
Like how the clouds.
Have covered up my dreams.
Lakes of glass.
In the middle of one.
I am a standing tree.
Land of mass.
Of all life and all beings.
Air, water, land.
A wondrous place, but still not free.
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Chris Ardelean Thanks for the great pics... it put out
and awsome poem for me... and thank you roaddog wolf...
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We do have to look within for our on freedom and work on making the break
Life is for living. Good take on the prompts . Thank you for sharing your thoughts for the ones I am left to ponder. Good luck in the contest.
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very nice, ah and is not freedom the ultimate aim to live for? Good write
thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest
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I like your thoughts, but try seeing if you can change your format a little, but using other punctuation than just periods. Maybe a comma, elipsis, semicolon, etc. That gives it a little different appearance, and keeps your eye going on down the page. Just a thought. Also, shining, I think, instead of shinning, is what you want.
Hope this helps! Nice write. faith
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