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Water Shortage

My skull enshrouded bone boundaries
are subjected to fluid fluctuations
through tear drop optical eye socket leaks
snot drain and finger plucked booger flicking.

Depending on how much brain water is changed
Too much crying and burger flicking
or crying yourself to sleep may cause
versonality pariances or dain bramage.

In cevere sases one might tow blears
cry boogers, serious eye sniffles day mevelop 


Author notes

work in dehydration
water

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  • Desire gold member
    July 25, 2008

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: Water Shortage
    This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I do several times~ Images come to me in many forms~ I must say the picture definitely had me not at a loss for H2O
    and he certainly brought many more customers to Starbucks for sure I imagine Love the dain bramage...I can relate to that when Diet Coke has gone on strike in the house because there are no ice cubes in the cup Complaint of working conditions...There are so many who take Life so seriously in a way that they forget to Live and Love- but elated to see this illustrates an *alternative* way to Love thyself without self-absorption and still keeping an ear out and Mind open - whether metaphor or symbolism Laughter a good elixir to stay young-
    Hopefully that makes some sense...
    and hey that booger got in my eye
    Excellent take on the prompt in ten lines (more or less) ~
    Powerful images & message You have brought forth

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Spirit!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • stavykm gold member
    July 22, 2008

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    OMG

    This is funny alright. I'm in serious trouble according to your poem of dehydration big brother. LOL
    Best of luck in the contest.
    Much Love
    Your Sis
    Kelle


  • maralisa silver member
    July 22, 2008

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    crying yourself to sleep may cause versonality pariances or dain bramage.In cevere sases one might tow blears
    cry boogers, serious eye sniffles day mevelop haha very funny take on the promt good luck in the contest


  • Daughter Grace silver member
    July 22, 2008
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    Booger Flicking Dad

    Love it's distortion with added tears. This is a fun one!


  • Venugopal gold member
    July 22, 2008
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    seems something mysterious, shrouded in medical parlance, well conceived poem

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