Although i never told you,
although i never said,
i love you more than anything,
thats why my sheets are red.
Suppose i should have told you,
suppose i should have said,
that every day that you not here,
i might as well be dead.
You may have never guessed it,
i never let it show,
but your the best thing in my life,
around you i just glow.
I want you here my darling,
i need you here with me,
without you i have nothing,
just lonely memories.
So please come back,
and i'll tell you,
just how much i care,
it's just my little secret,
listen if you care.
Author notes
This is something i've always wanted to tell someone in my life but never had the guts. Now they want nothing more to do with me. I blame myself. Think it's because i never showed them how i really felt.
A contest entry
- Your deepest darkest secret... by AutumnsFlame.
662 points, ended September 1, 2008, 21 entries
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I'm glad you put rhyme and rhythem to this, I absolutely LOVE reading poems like that! You definetly have the beat of it down, and some people don't posess that talent, so excellent work. Slightly cliche, but it wasn't bad. Not bad at all. The only REAL complaint I have is the last stanza because it doesn't fit with the rest of the poem. It didn't have the same "blues" feel to it as the rest of the poem did. Thank you for entering my contest.
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I wish i could give it applause... i don't have the points on AP.. but it would get 3 if i could...
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very beautiful... it scans wonderfully and has so much depth. i understand how hard it can be to tell someone what you feel for them, but not as hard as it is when you lose them. it's a hard lesson to learn, and probably not one you forget in a hurry. I loved this poem, it had a lot of feeling, and so many people can relate to it many different ways. i'm also glad you didn't say who it was about... it could be about a lover, a family member or a friend... such a beautiful piece...
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