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sunrise, sunset

shh!!!
u shouldn't speak
never speak
rising is the sun
i just want you to see
shh!!!!
everyone look at the sunrising

shh!!!
u should watch
now is the time
shh!!!
everyone, do you see it?
the sun is setting

Author notes

ok i tried.. it sounded fun.. so i tried.. its not that great but i tried ^_^

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  • Darkwell
    July 22, 2008

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    that was lovely in its simplicity of theme and it has a special silence to it so shh!!

    Nicely
    Interpreted
    Chosen
    Expression

    Good luck in the contest!

  • Asabouros.
    July 22, 2008
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    It sounds kind of funn, it made me smile, good luck