i walked, i talked and i listen to my
people talked about the hard-ship that
they was going through.
i fought a good fight for a good reason
and lost my land to men's that came from
the distance sea from the deep of the
ocean.
they raped my land and my people
they sold us on the black market
and out in the open.
as i looked up at my people cry's for help
and asked for their freedom my heart
melt like a ice out in the sun.
my people would no longer suffer
the pain and un-natural thoughts
of our holders and fear the things
that no one should fear.
my kids will play out in the open fields
and learn how to hunt and scanned for food
they would know who they are and what they
stand for.
my people would be free and happy even if we had to
run away from our holder's and slaver's.
my people would no longer cry in the dark
and hide in the light. this is true and i am
the leader of my people i will give up my life
to see them go home with the freedom and the strength.
of our nation as one people.
Author notes
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i am part indian what about you
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My grandmother was Native American so I have a bit of that in me! Though I do not look it I have 100% NA Spirit in my heart! I love that you chose to do this in a tribute to our people! They truly worship and respect this Earth and all of God's creations! Thank you for entering my contest!
~Blessed Be~
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I love it! I have roughly 25% Cherokee in me and I often wonder how life would be today had they not caused these wonderful people to nearly go extinct.
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I like your title. Yes I am part indian too. It works really well with the piece.
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Very powerful write I must say. It was indeed heartfelt and patriotic with the sense of hope and bravery put in the poem after what history has presented. Great job although there are spelling errors that need to be corrected to fit in with the context (scanned need to be replaced with scan for example), though other than that good job.
Thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!
~Emily~ xx
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I'm about a quarter indian, my dad is half, but he was adopted so we don't know what tribe. i love how you wrote like an actual indian from back then would talk. great job and good luck
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This is a nicely expressed patriotic write of hope and growth.
There are some corrections that need to be done in some parts of the poem. Eg: It should be "men" and not "men's" and
"distant sea" in place of "distance sea", etc.
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a topic that we all must learn and read about..very different..not what i expected...unique..and it stands out..wonderful poem and a good lesson on history..the domination instinct found in man is something that we all should be afraid of..great job and good luck in the contest
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another of your great poem
i am feeling it
seems like we can sing it
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