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Glutton


Time is a glutton

that eats and eats all in its path,

never satisfied with little morsels.

It eats the living and the dead,

It does not discriminate nor care,

all are tasted and digested

by the gastro-temporal tract-

bodies, minds, memories, dreams

Transformed into the vaporized

 

excrement of history.


All lives and strivings will be undone

by its unrelenting hunger to consume.

It will devour all that I am, for:

What am I if not memories?

How can I exist, in this time or any,

if no one remembers I ever was?

"I" am a ghost of information

extended across many selves:

"I" inhabits this physical atomic swarm of body

"I" am nothing but the imprinted neuronal architecture

residing in my 3 pound gelatinous brain

"I" am nothing but networks of cells, trigger happy

in the minds of friends, families, lovers, others.

Soon the deletion will come, reality wipe of

my mind and with it its inconstant memories of self-

the myth of my life and all its costars,

The minds of all I've ever met and their

shifting nebulous imaginings of me;

The pounds of materialistic matter-

concrete exterior traces,

belongings and creations

Virtual and concrete.



It eats and I rebuild-

but something is always lost,

changed, forever.  You are

never the same person twice:

Who you were is gone, as will be who you are.

I can feel it digesting me from within,

the acid sting of years

passing ever more quickly.



Every second the Universe proclaims:

 

Decay! Decay! Decay! Decay!

It rings in my ears

and all around me,

its blind bites diminish

those near and far and dear.


My hope wanes against  its eternal predations,

My fears blossom before my inescapable degradation.


Author notes

"I've seen things you people wouldn't believe.
Attack ships on fire off the shoulder of Orion.
I watched C-beams glitter in the dark near the Tannhauser gate.
All those moments will be lost in time....
......Like tears in rain. Time to die"

 

Roy Batty/Rutger Hauer - " Blade Runner "

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  • Danna Hobart
    December 17, 2008
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    Well, I started out liking your metaphor very much, but it droned on a little too much for me. You started losing me around here:

    "I" inhabits this physical atomic swarm of body

    which is when you stopped using imagery.

    My suggestions would be either to cut out some of the lines that tell rather than show, or else, find a way to turn those lines into showing lines.


  • Polaja Greeters member
    August 7, 2008

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    I really like the perspective of time as the slow devourer that you have developed so well. Thank you for entering this contest just a note to ask you to check that you have followed the rules - I wish you the best of luck when it comes to judging!

    Keep writing

    Polly


  • Sincerely
    July 25, 2008

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    Bless you for putting forth a viewpoint in a carefully crafted, artfully worded little piece.

    I was a little worried when the word eat came up twice in the first stanza, but then the vocabulary exploded and I couldn't have been happier. Well written, convincing in its subtleness, and unrelenting in its ideas and ideals

    kudos to you
    Much Love.


  • Poetic Obscenity
    July 24, 2008
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    Wow

    AMAZING. Another poem to leave me speachless.

    Thank you and good luck.


  • Harmonious Jade
    July 21, 2008

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    Amazing...

    What a piece! This poem is the pinnacle of truth and reality. We are just exactly what you say, a memeory in the minds of others...we hope at least. Time is a neutral devourer that does not discriminate and will eventually take us all. We must hope that use our time wisely and make the most of the mere seconds that we exist, for before we know it...its all gone. The oroniy is of course that when it comes, we will never know. A masterful poem in any case, loved every single line and has taught me on what a level a true master thinks...

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