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Tears Roll Down

 

Dripping off my face,
these memories of how your love
slowly fades away.

I get choked up trying to say your name.
If only I could change your mind,
would things still be this way?

I cry not because of what you did,
but because of how things have changed.
That nightly I am without you and
in my arms, you don't remain.

I cry for you, not because of you.

 

 

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Option - 3-Song Title Prompts
"Tears Roll Down"

Option - 5. The one who loves you is the one who will make you weep

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  • RareFlower
    March 25

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    breathtaking

    I cry for you... wow.. such despair and longing.. such heartfelt yearning.. every word i feel Thankyou soo much for sharing
    RareFlower


  • ratkos
    August 8, 2008
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    i have been here and i feel it.you've portrayed it very well.beautiful write thank you


  • Never.Give.Up silver member
    July 26, 2008

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    WOW this is amazing, So beautifully sad.

    A wonderful write that created lovely imagery, I wish you all the best in this contest.


    Rose


  • movedon
    July 23, 2008

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    Oh wow the last line is really good. Best of luck in the contest! Hope you get gold!

    Warmest,
    Mylee


  • penman gold member
    July 21, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Such deep emotions. So very well expressed. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Mistress Masquerade
    July 21, 2008

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    Haunting is the perfect word for this work, just... I'm stunned. This is deep and sorrowful... Just stunning in every way. Best of luck, the last line just pulled the entire thing together.


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    July 21, 2008

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    oh wow Cuz...this has that haunting, reaching for ones heart and grabbing at it factor, to me

    these are some deeps word..and the sadness comes through..i love that last line...the true point...I cry for you, not becuase of you

    there is a difference..a big one..and your poem shows it well too


    Hope you do well in the contest with it


  • Darkwell
    July 21, 2008

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    oooh this is deep about yearning

    I cry for you, not because of you.

    i love that line

    very well penned

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