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talking in your sleep

baby dont worry you will be okay
i hear you talking in your sleep
yelling orders at your men
which areas arent secured
which direction the enemy is spotted
i hear you saying prays
and talking bravely to the men
for the lifes that were lost
but how none of you
will forget their sacrific

i hear you talking about
how much you miss me
how much you just want to be home
how much you hate it over there
how you hate how hot always is


baby dont worry
your home now
its all there
your memories
and your pain
i hear it all while your
talking in you sleep

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  • Symphony
    April 15

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    This part was heartbreaking,

    "baby dont worry you will be okay
    i hear you talking in your sleep
    yelling orders at your men"

    Seriously ... God, that just hit me hard....

    Excellently written. What some people go through that the rest of us can't imagine...

    Thanks for entering.


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    July 23, 2008

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    It's scary when someone talks in there sleep sometimes, especially when what they say is audible, as you can see the kind of pain they may be in. Sad, but sweet.


  • Mary Jane.
    July 21, 2008
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    wow. i really like this hun. its sad tho... but well written. i know barrett talks about it in his sleep... i've heard it. it scared the shit out of me the first time i heard it... i just wanted to wake him up and tell him it was alright. but i couldn't...


    • camo.egg.army.gurl
      July 21, 2008

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      i know...you know..they prefer you not to mention that you heard them..because it makes them feel "weak"


      • Mary Jane.
        July 21, 2008

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        they are anything but weak... i wish he'd believe me... they never listen... so freaking stubborn

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