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To a Sapling, Pt. 3

 

 

 

 

       The Sun is out;

He only wants to bless.

 

 

              But blessings

   always come with hardships.

 

 

         The warmth will bring growth.

 

All will want the power.

    Weeds strangle rich lands;

Do not let them choke you.

       Weapons formed against you

     shall outgrow themselves.

Give no ground.

 

 

There is no ground to give.

Claim what is yours.

         

 

        The afternoons will warm your atmosphere.

 

The heavens will rebel.

    Thunder will roar; let it fall on your deaf ears.

Lightning will threaten,

   it's rage will consume countries.

               Stand resoved against the firestorms.

 

 

 

Let yourself laugh

when grass mocks you with flame.

 

 

Let your roots dig deep

into the Stream at your side. 

 

 

 

Let the open plain never dissuade your purpose;

one day you will bring shade.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Mortal
    July 22, 2008
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    Upon rereading I'm revising my comment. I really like the idea, it covers the positives and negatives of summer in an original abstract way.I also like the way the advice given can be applied to a human as well.

  • VeneVidiVici
    July 22, 2008

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    (Sort of co-judging with Foolish Mortal, per her request)

    I think it's abstract enough; the fact that it doesn't make a direct connection with the season of Summer is a plus in itself; instead, you wrote about the height of natural life in all its strength, which is, after all, what Summer really is. Well-thought-out and very eloquently written. You seem like a jaded poet who can paint a wonderful picture and make it come to life. A great entry. Good luck in the contest!

  • Cyber Artist Moderators member
    July 22, 2008

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    this was full of the summers where I live hot dry and often wild electrical storms with the loudest of thunder often resulting in fire. the poem cascades down the page covering the sequences perfectly well done...
    Cyber Artist


  • Mortal
    July 21, 2008

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    Your line spacing is interesting and the metaphor is nice but it's not quite as abstract as it could have been. it does continue with the usual summer imagery. The format of it was nice but the fact it's a part confuses me.