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Lets.Freeze.Time

Racing the clock is almost
what i'm doing. Counting the
seconds till we're no longer
together. Dreading the moment
when our inside jokes are no
longer funny.

I'm Scared.

Trying to find the pause button
on life. Praying that i'm in a
coma so i can wake up to the night
when everything was set in stone.
That we'd never break apart.

Why Now?

It's not easy saying goodbye for
a second, but in two years i'd
rather fall apart and live life
in a jar than to say goodbye forever.

It's Happening.

I'll never forget the goofy dances
done in parking lots after basketball
games. Or the meaningful handshakes
we tried to create, but often failed.
Will we forget our childish moments of
walking in the rain, jumping and pushing
each other infront of cars?

Times Slipping.

Whenever i think about us no longer
walking down the halls, arms linked with
hope in our eyes; a tear falls. When the
songs we usually danced to finally stop
playing, i think a piece of me will be
forever trapped in the lyrics.

Hopeful Memory.

When the guys who broke our hearts and
the tramps that helped them look us dead
in our eyes and apologize, will the anger
that we shared for them finally decease?
Will we forget the times we whispered
behind them and spread rumors about each
of them? Or will we be the bigger person
and apologize as well?

What's Going To Happen?

I perish the thoughts that whenever i need
a shoulder to cry on that it won't be yours.
I'm scared that when i finally look at the
person who's holding my hand through all
my struggles that it wont be yours.

Don't Leave.

I want to cling onto you for eternity, I
want these moments to never end. I want to
look up in the future to see you smiling at
me with hope in your eyes and danger in your
heart.

Hurry...

Times sliding away so fast that it feels like
rope burn on my heart. And i don't know how
much longer I can hold on.


All i can say is

Don't
  Leave
    Me
      Now...










Author notes

Prompt 11:There are plenty of fish in the sea but you'll always be my nemo.

i wanna dedicate this to ALL my friends. The ones on here, on myspace, the ones i go to school with. I love you guys...i think i'd break to pieces without you guys. i love love love love love love yous
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opt 3/11
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prompt 7

A contest entry

i'm in a funky state right now....

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Comments

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  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    August 28, 2008

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    What a beautiful dedication to friendship, without all the special little moments we treasure with friends, life would be pretty empty, nice to see you thanking those you love, well done, best to you


    • edit my world.
      August 30, 2008
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      without my friends i'd be an emotional wreck. so they totally need so loving with a giant thank you poem


  • LadyDementia gold member
    August 27, 2008

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    This was interesting, the little headers were eye catching and quite stong. Beautiful dedication, we all need friends Good luck


  • TChaplinette
    August 15, 2008
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    that was very well done.

    thanks for entering
    and good luck.
    taylor.


  • Hetha gold member
    August 3, 2008

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    WE never forget the people we love. Whether we have loved them in the past, present or future. We remember both good and bad. We learn, we grow, our feelings change, and they develop into something better and more loveable each time we fall for it.


  • xXxIceQueenxXx
    July 30, 2008

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    Very interesting write. I like the way this piece drifts through time itself. I really life the lines "when the songs we usually danced to finally stop playing, I think a piece of me will be forever trapped in the lyrics" and the part of "when our inside jokes are no longer funny". They really add to the emotion of the piece.

    However, my only complaint against this poem would be in the 1st line: "racing the clock ALMOST IS what I'm doing" in my opinion would sound better as "racing the clock IS ALMOST what I'm doing".

    Of course that's a very minor complaint to such a lovely piece of writing!

    Thank you for entering my contest!!


  • gothicchildren05
    July 29, 2008

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    I think we all feel this way at least once in our lives....we all go our separate ways sometimes.....especially when you graduate and whatnot. I know some of my friends have their own lives now but we try to keep in touch still as much as we can...it's not that easy when you part and don't see them as much..but keeping in contact is the key to all good friendships. this is a good piece. thank you for entering and good luck.


  • ChunkyC
    July 28, 2008

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    Wow. This is an amaaaazing write. I can totally relate to every word. I know how it feels every year to watch those seniors leave me and move on to bigger and better things in their lives. All we can do is hold on to what we have now and hope that it's there in the morning when we wake up, because the truth is that our day will come too and we'll have to walk across that stage and leave behind people that we love the most too.

    I love the way you decided to end this poem. I'm sure that I've asked thousands of people to not leave me when I really needed them. I'm so happy that I have my friends in my own grade and that I will always have someone there for me.

    Amaaazing write. Keep up the amazing work.


  • EmoAngel14
    July 27, 2008
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    WOW

    I LOVE it. and the same here iwould DIE without mi friends i love em ta death. all of them. Great write keep up the great work.

  • Topnotchsy
    July 26, 2008

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    Really touching piece, definitely deserving of the gold trophy it netted. Thankfully with email, myspace, cellphones etc. these days, you can keep in touch with pretty much anyone anywhere. While leaving school means the end to a degree, the memories always come with you, and any ending is also a brand new beginning, the beginning of something new and exciting, and a chance to make new friends and create new memories.


  • Poetdontknowit
    July 26, 2008

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    HMMMMM

    Well, your authors note says you are in a funky state right now, so if that is the case, then it FOR SURE makes you write like a pro. You soooo remind me of myself at your age! I could have written this myself. I can see why it won a gold. Just hold on to your memories, write them down as you have, for they will become more distant, believe me. I think you have an eggcelent talent. Don't ever put your pen down!!!!
    POETDONTKNOWIT
    WRITING IT HER OWN WAY


  • AnonymousXO
    July 26, 2008

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    I like the format. Hmm...maybe you could include the prompt in the poem, perhaps? It is very well written though
    Anonymousxo *rose

  • celadia
    July 26, 2008

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    I think this is original in the way it's written and shows us the unwanted break-up that we all go through at one time or another. It touched me, so maybe I'm not the best critter and can't give you any advice, but I found it moving.


  • lightswitches
    July 26, 2008

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    hmm This poem is kind of sad, and this contest is supposed to be about the cheery ones.
    However, it is still well done, and it is a poem about a feeling that we all have had, or will have.
    Nice


  • SabbyLou
    July 24, 2008

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    ok im crying.
    reading that just. wow. it took my breathe away.
    i dont know what to say.
    amazing!


  • stargazer.
    July 22, 2008

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    Wow this is an amazing poem it caught me at the first stanza cause it reminds me of my friends and how im scared once we graduate HS ill lose them like my JH friends,You actually made me cry =].

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