Fading shadows in hues of gray
cast a murky silhouette,
of a gentle soul suspended in
an alternate realm of sorrow.
She's called Melancholy Rose,
a damsel in distress.
Her spirit wanders along an
isolated beach searching for
a lost love.
On one bleak Autumns night while
they were spooning by the shore,
she submerged into turbulent waters
as the waves billowed mountains high.
Though she was a skillful swimmer
the sea proved to be her match.
In one awesome swoop her body
was engulfed and taken underwater.
The locals say to this day
you can hear her eerie screams.
Horatio! Horatio! Horation!
Help me! Help me! Help me!
Horatio! Horatio! Horatio!
Echoing in the wind.
Not a solitary soul sets foot upon
the unhollowed grounds at night.
Fearful that they too maybe swallowed
up by a raging sea.
To appease the damsels yearning heart
that desperately desires to be free.
Author notes
1. The picture is the prompt. see link below.
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2414865
Comments
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Ok I am held captive, eerie and freaked me some what
Haunting and deep
Thank you for your great entry and best wishes
Julie -
Yep. You gave me goosebumps when reading this. The imagery is awesome. Thank you very much for your entry.
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OOoo I like the picture your poem has painted. Another
excellent read with such vivid images..Good luck!
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This was really cool, I liked it very much. You had me curious and hooked to find out the ending of it. Great write, keep it up
~~Tori~~
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Beautiful imagery in this piece baby.
adding the toppings to my sorbet is what you do Best
Good luck in the contest. I really enjoyed this.
BossLady
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Imagery is great and word usage perfect. You did a marvelous job here. Pen on...
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WWWWWWWWWWWWWOOOOOOOOOOW
okay wow. i loved this imagery. it was amazing. when you were explaining on the beach i could hear everything as tho i was there. thats really good writing. then also in the beginning that was also amazing. you mite want to start off a little differently tho next time. i mean the tittle is the tale of the meloncoly rose so why not put that in there more. also you mite want to reprase the part when you say the locals say to this day. where did that come from??
other than that it was an amazing poem and you did a wonderful job on it and i loved it.
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