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The Mouse and the Toad

A love-hungry rodent desperately wanted a mate,
He’d tried other mice but they were too underweight,
A cross-species relationship was rather ambitious,
But he found frogs and toads to be rather delicious.

Just imagine the offspring with an amphibious spouse,
Jumping talent of a toad, with agility of a mouse!
At mealtimes the young one would be easy to please,
Either a flipper of flies, or a paw full of cheese.

So the love-hungry rodent found his future playmate,
Like a true Casanova, talked it into a date,
They strolled through the dirt and swam through the pond,
And the implausible duo quickly started to bond

Emotions were soaring, they found heavenly bliss,
Nothing could stop them sharing loves first kiss,
As the passionate couple parted from the embrace,
The toad disappeared – a handsome prince in its place!

The mouse started to weep, he felt so betrayed,
How could the toad trick him with such a charade?
But the prince took the mouse and upheld a debt,
To take care of that mouse as his prized royal pet.

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  • Topnotchsy
    August 17, 2008

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    Haha, great original write. Congrats on the gold trophy and nice job with the rhyme and meter on this piece.

  • ecrivain01
    July 29, 2008
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    Cute ...

    congratulations on the Gold trophy.


  • Elrenia
    July 29, 2008

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    Cute story. A few grammatical problems, but nothing too distracting.

    Congratulations on your placing.
    Thank you for sharing.

    rous


  • daviscth silver member
    July 26, 2008

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    Oh, I just love this!!! What a wonderful response to the picture. All the best of luck in the contest.


  • paperparadox silver member
    July 21, 2008

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    Yay... ... I love happy endings! LOL

    A well-told tale in true nursery rhyme tradition. Nice meter and good rhyme ~ I'm particularly fond of couplets in story-telling poetry. There's something especially pleasing in its immediacy, don't you think?

    Just a couple of quickie-fix-its:

    (Full stop at the end of the third stanza).

    '...sharing loves (love's) first kiss,'

    Thanks for entering this contest, and very best of luck.

    BTW, please do NOT respond to this message until after the judging, to ensure a fair and anonymous contest.

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