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Suave Mindful Hope

Eyes closed,
Within I see a whirlwind of thoughts,
Each more burdened than the one before.
They fly surrounding me in a circle of hope

Maybe there is chance for me tomorrow.
Maybe there is a reason for me to remain,
For me to hope,

There are many things that I desire,
Many things I hope,
But sitting here may not have influence.

I remain laying on the cold winter concrete.
Looking forward for summer’s sun,
And spring rebirth.

It’s within me to change.

Slowly I open my eyes,
The light dazzles me. Strong
Reality of the world outside,
It’s time to stand and move forward.

There's hope, I know there is hope.

Standing deciding to remain,
Creating, a tornado of memories
And hopes, thoughts, and laughter
Surround themselves on me. It’s a whirlwind
Of hope, rebirth, and the possibility of love.


My flowing glossy black dress
Gets caught in the wind,
As it flows and turns in a vortex,
The glass beneath me disappears,
I see a big city beneath,
Sorrows try to climb and bring me down,
But I remain standing because of
Dreams
Because of

Hope.

I levitate myself forward,
Inspired to keep smiling,
Inspired to keep fighting,
Hope of dreaming,
Hope of living,
Now I know
I am
Free

And so I let myself go,
With a smile on my face I fall

Did I expect to fall on your arms?
I hoped.

And so here I am.

Deep within you arms,
Facing the new day,
Glad of this chance to remain.

Knowing,
There’s hope.

Author notes

Images created by the song State of Mind by Raul Midón.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zzaClXAt3aY&feature=related

thanks for the prompt.

It was amazing.

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  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    August 9, 2008

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    I enjoyed this poem alot. You used some great imagery. The following lines really struck a chord with me:

    I remain laying on the cold winter concrete.
    Looking forward for summer’s sun,
    And spring rebirth.

    Great job.

    Mike

  • Moon Raven
    July 29, 2008
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    Wow!! This is such a beautiful poem. It brings tears to my eyes. I love the imagery and symbolism you used to make this piece. The story is so wonderfully penned into this rich poem that I had to read it over again. The troubled beginning of this piece really emphasizes the poem's inspiring qualities. From the very first stanza I was captivated. Wonderfully done.

  • Improv Machinery
    July 23, 2008

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    im glad you enjoyed the prompt. you did an amazing job with this. the title fir like a pair of custom made shoes, as did the backround. i could hear the chord progression in my head as i was reading this; there was no need to listen to the song. i weas very uplifted by the message of hope in this poem, it did me a lot of good. thank you for entering and i wish you the best of luck in my contest.
    Rob


    • Mila7
      July 24, 2008
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      Thank you so much for your comment and applause! I'm glad you liked it. I am very grateful.

  • Improv Machinery
    July 22, 2008
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    hehehehe, thanks.
    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zzaClXAt3aY its called State Of Mind by Raul Midon.

    • Mila7
      July 22, 2008
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      HE IS AMAZING! thank you so much I got an image on my head, and I'm sure I can move on from here. great prompt thanks!


    • Mila7
      July 22, 2008
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      Cool thanks I'll see what I can do with it- mila

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