It's the edge
and for the life of me
I can't see beyond that;
all the scratching
itching in palpatation
skipped heart beats
thumping and sailing
the nails through a
mind that expected less
forever isn't all that far
now that the wind is fierce
picking me up like a
chiseled mortar vessel;
and I spin again through
the vortex of its might
over and over with
no withdrawal;
I find the end at tunnel's
final barclay dropping
me into the fire of
its barbaric nest.
A contest entry
- let the music set you free by Improv Machinery.
1100 points, ended August 9, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Prompted by the wirey and intense "Tunnel Vision" by John Petrucci--- 'can't stop a miracle'.
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I love, love, love the progression in this poem. I could feel the build up of the music very well. It undulates with excitement, dropping the listener into a crash of passionate exhaustion. This is actually very music oriented. I know music pretty well (I used to sing with a group) and this really tells a story. Good luck in the contest. I hope this is appreciated appropriately.
~ Joyce
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Thank you. I didn't know you were a singer~
Did you get to hear the music that this had
to accompany for the contest.........that I didn't
place, by the way? lol
It was fun anyhow. Music can really inspire a poem. I'm glad I did this.
Love.........Dianne the Cookie
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you did rather nicely with this. i didnt even have to listen to the song to hear it as i was reading this. you played the title very well and i like the whole battle aspect of it. great write.
Rob -
s'okay.I have it
It's not letting me post the confirmation of read criteria, so here it is here.
you can't stop a miracle
It was inspired by the prompt
for John Petrucci's "Tunnel Vision".
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its not letting me send links at the moment but your song is called Tunnel Vision by John Petrucci. i will send you the link as soon as i am able.
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