the world is full of ultimatums
and responsibilites
and forgotten things-
full of phone calls
that haven't been made
or returned or answered...
and so piled up with
conversations!
ones you didn't want to have,
ones you should have had,
ones you're too afraid to start
or to finish...
and an eternity's worth
of ones you'll never have.
the world is full of people you're avoiding
and deadlines or appointments
that you've missed
and yet
i am so crowded
by empty things-
rooms, houses, driveways,
bank accounts and beds-
words and gestures and even
heads...
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i keep thinking i should add to this. usually the opposite is true- i tend to ramble. i'd appreciate an opinion on that matter, but any old opinion will do. thanks.
whachu think? too short?
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I LOVE IT!
and i like how it ends, i feel the ending says it all, it seems perfect to me lengthwise and content, also, thanks so much for your comments on mine
PEACE
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definately needs an ending. adding would be good. you reach a turning point 'and yet...' but i feel like it hasn't been fleshed out. would love to read the finished product.
on a side note, i have an interesting proposition for you. a few friends and i have started a private poetry blog. we'd love to have you as a member- if you're interested, let me know and i'll send you the info. -
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sounds interesting! i'll give it a go =)
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