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Shadows Of Butterflies

Dust on a rock
burnt by the sun
yellow and white
shadows of butterflies

They fly upon morning
on breezes kin
till they die
in a quiet din

Water of rain
louder than
your wings
rainbows on sunsets

Dusk has come
to claim
those burned in the sun
making shadows of butterflies

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  • Aerlynne
    July 25, 2008

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    Beautiful

    You paint such a beautiful picture, yet there seems also to be a sense of deep longing and loss...

    Touching


  • raspberry Greeters member
    July 23, 2008

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    Rainbow on Sunsets!!! WOW.. I just love and cant wait to get a glimpse.. Beautiful this poem is.. utterly gorgeous


  • spice12087
    July 22, 2008

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    Well I like butterflies very much. This is sad and in a weird sense pretty. I think you did a nice job with it. It's simple, and the imagery was very clear. Good job, keep it up.
    ~~Tori~~


  • HaleyMary
    July 21, 2008

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    Beautiful write. Wonderful imagery in this piece. I liked the third stanza the best. It seemed metaphorical, like the beauty of nature being able to seem like it's singing or something. Keep that pen flowing.

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