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Your Star

[chorus]
I feel my soul fading
as the darkness closes in
I can't stand it here anymore
without the light from your star



Never thought that I could
be so fragile without you here
it's like trying to swim through tears
in a river that's long been dry


Never lived outside your shadow
or felt the wind blow so cold
summer has turned to winter
with every day that you've been gone


[Repeat chorus]


Never understood the answer
to why you had to leave
didn't think heaven was so lonely
that you they needed to keep


Never complaining
I will walk alone
knowing fate will not decieve me
until the light from your star
calls me home, calls me home, calls me home


[Repeat chorus to fade]

Author notes

Chose prompt option 36 a) Write about the song "Your Star" by Evanescence www.youtube.com/watch?v=PpmpBTIsjl8 . I ended up writing my own song with that title, hope you enjoy.

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Comments

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  • Raptur3
    August 2, 2008
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    I love that song, welll Your Star by evanescence. Nice tho, very bittersweet


  • daviscth silver member
    July 22, 2008

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    Oh wow!! This is awesome!! The imagery is outstanding and I just love it. Thanks so much for sharing it with me and good luck in the contest.


  • Frozentearz
    July 22, 2008

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    ahhhhhhh a song writer you are, this was amazing,
    I could hear it in my head.. well done my Dear well done best of luck to you in the contest.
    Blessings,
    Frozentearz


  • poet2angels gold member
    July 22, 2008

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    Oh, Cuz!...This is amazing...You need to write more lyrics! You have some real talent here, but what CAN'T you write
    I love this....It woke me up and got me stirring

    Lynda


    • Errant Panther gold member
      July 22, 2008
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      lovely comment, you always manage to make me blush.
      glad you enjoyed reading it.


  • Nature Song silver member
    July 21, 2008

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    Wonderful song. Music to words Ilove to read. It is never easy loosing anyone, but someday I hope you find "Your Star"...~Sie


  • RaeRayMusic
    July 21, 2008

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    a. Write a poem based off of the song Your Star by Evanescence

    b. Write a poem with the title of 'Fake Love'

    c. Write a poem based off of this quote:
    Why do we kill people who kill people to show people that killing is wrong?

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