RIDING OFF INTO THE SUNSET
I watched with withering hopes and shattered dreams as my beloved
rode slowly off into a golden sunset. He looked beautiful riding on
that sleek black Arabian Mare with his long dark tresses flowing
gently in the warm southern breeze. To my eyes, he looked radiant.
Then suddenly, out of nowhere, I saw him pause as if in a deep
thought. My heart jumped several beats as he turned looking in the
direction he had just ridden. With his dark piercing eyes he glanced
in my general direction and noticed me standing there all alone
enveloped in my all-consuming sadness.
I swear on all that I hold holy that I saw it then. That smile! It
lit up his whole face and shocked me to my very bones. Was that
really a smile coming from him? I have never seen him smile let
alone out here in the open for all to see. Could I really mean so
much to him that he would expose himself in such away?
More than anything this smile gave me much to hope for. Hope for a
future. Hope for our happiness together. Hope that our love would
survive even this separation.
Author notes
I am sorry to say that I don't know any single person who is in the military just yet. So I thought that I would dedicate this poem to all the serving members of the military. Out of respect to each and every one of them. They all deserve my respect for serving our country and protecting all our rights and priviledges over here in the land of the free.
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- Farewell my friend's (Come dedicate a poem to those who are leaving us) by Meroza.
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so i ow have this need sincwe tyou tried t hsoe me up, to come and visit and see hoe well tyou write, which is not hat well. before you decide to openly attack another person, thik please of their comecemach! i could have been a cyunt to you, buit i was not, but you openly speak to me saying my thoughts are second hand! if you class yourself as intelligent then think
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Excellent poem, i can picture the scene clearly in my mind
well done
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One of the most brilliant to say, honestly it instills a deep sense of compassion
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An absolutely beautiful poem, Trekkergirl. This piece was very moving and the images that came from your words were wonderful. What a wonderful piece which you could probably turn into a story if you really wanted. I loved it to bits.
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I truly like the way you think!!!!
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nicely penned . . liked "with withering hopes and shattered dreams" and "enveloped in my all-consuming sadness" . . well done
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I am sorry but you clearly didnt read my rules, or anything I said at all. I am awear that the photo I use is a military boat leaving to sea but that is not the topic.
The topic is dedicate a poem to those who are leaving All Poetry. Try reading the rules, or acctualy read something I sad and see if there isn't anyone you can dedicate your poem to.
You have a deadline 'til I end the contest so that gives you a few days. If you havent read a single word in the contests by then I am afraid I will not judge your poem.
- Meroza -
Sorry I couldn't tell you a name but to be honest I don't know anyone who is leaving for service right now. I do know a doctor who is a heart surgeon. He just recently did my mom's open heart surgery. I believe that he is going back over sea's soon. But I am not real close friends of his. I just believe they all deserve our respect for what they are going through over there.
May they all be in our prayers and come home safe soon.
trekkergirl -
A nice short story indeed, very gripping and not boring at all.
Tho, you did miss something, write the name of the person in your AN.
Best of luck
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Nice!
Looks like the ending to a combination romance/adventure novel. Great work, trekker.
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