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Star in the Sky

I am a star in the sky

My true potential lays hidden
As till my lips I am drown deep
And sinking in marshy darkness

The more I try to be out;
Like a spring is tied to my heart;

(To and fro, to and fro
And I am where, I was, back…)

Only five fingers of palm
Can be seen faintly as in
A child’s color book.

People pass me by, as if I am a drawing
They appreciate me, as if I am a drawing
And I show them the way, as if I am a drawing

Of a child, and the way to imagination
Or destination, doesn’t make a difference

Although I am always captured by darkness
And hence I give directions to lost travelers.

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  • Jalalbad gold member
    August 3
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    excellant write

    good luck.

  • Humm..very deep and thoughful work by the poet..I love it...well done..and my thanks for sharing such a wonderful write ...

  • Polaja
    July 24

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    I really like the last two stanzas - I think that they are beautifully written and very emotive... I really enjoyed this poem - although there was one line that I thought could be revised: 'As till my lips I am drown deep' to make it flow more like the rest of the poem - but that is just my opinion (and I could be wrong ) - I wish you the best in the contest!

    Keep writing

    Polly